2009年12月2日星期三

What do you think about this? - ';The Desert Bloom';?

Alone and lonely, through and through,


This dome, enameled, cold and blue


Spread out as far as eyes can see,


This desert really frightens me.





You and I in our own way,


Are lonely travelers gone astray,


O desert bloom! enlighten me,


What is the goal of your journey?





Alas! This hillside bears no more,


A Moses to converse with or,


Aren鈥檛 you the flame of Mount Sinai?


Aren鈥檛 I the flame of Mount Sinai?





Why did you blossom, a lonely shoot?


What did I follow in hot pursuit?


Was it the call of our instinct?


The pride and joy of being distinct?





May God extend His hands above


The divers of the sea called Love,


For every drop of this deep sea


Has dimensions of Eternity.





The whirlpools in the sea that raves


Are its eyes weeping on the graves


Of wavelets born in the ocean鈥檚 core


Destined never to reach the shore.





The vibrant energy of Man,


Is a thing unique for what else can,


Keep the universe moving incessantly


While the sun and stars watch silentlyWhat do you think about this? - ';The Desert Bloom';?
What is the goal of your journey doesnt rhyme with the previous line.


Change it to what it is the goal of thee.





Splendid poem.What do you think about this? - ';The Desert Bloom';?
There are some good lines (well one anyway. ';This dome, enamelled, cold and blue';) and some cr%26amp;p lines. Don't give up the day job until you are a little more mature. It's self-indulgent.


Mankind doesn't keep the universe moving nor do we have the monopoly on ';vibrant energy';
It's very interesting. I like it.

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